Drabble: Next Time

Genre: fantasy


Must. Resist. Can’t. Give. In.

“You know you want it.”

“Everyone knows I want it.”

“Look at it.” He dangled it right before her eyes.


“Imagine how awesome it would look in your collection.”

It was because she knew how well it would fit into that eyesore of an empty space that she was so tempted.

“All I need is ten minutes,” he said.

… Ten minutes?

“Five,” she bargained.


She looked at him from head to toe.

“Five,” she insisted.

“Five. Deal?”

She held out our hand. He dropped the shiny trinket into her small palm.

“Five minutes,” she reminded him and stepped aside. After the man slipped through the doors into the room, she started counting. One minute, two, three, four, five.

She peered into the room. The man had already become food for the room guardian within.

And he thought he could last without her intervention for ten minutes. How optimistic.

Next time, she would only open the door for those who had already proven themselves. Next time.



I thought ‘tempted’ would be an easy prompt to write for, then I started writing, and I couldn’t really decide how I wanted the story to go. I didn’t want to be just another story about getting tempted by chocolate and affairs, but I most of the day had passed and I was still trying to figure out what to write.

So I started writing the story without a specific temptation in mind, and as I wrote, I discovered a twist I could add. Hope you like it 🙂


Posted on January 6, 2017, in Short Stories and tagged , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 5 Comments.

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